EndlessMidnight
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Unrequited - May PotMUnrequited
To love
Without reciprocation
Causes the heart
To break gradually
Almost unnoticeably
Hairline fractures
Grow slowly each day
Until the fragile heart
Shatters
As a fly on the wall
Goes unnoticed
I as well
Am an afterthought
Never to be loved
In the same way
I love you
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Blind Crow
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Beautiful and frightening. The sheer wording is quite nice, while the idea behind of it is a bit scary in the sense that one could slowly break by the actions of another.
I really enjoyed this. Particularly the second stanza for some reason.
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poggles
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I really like this one!
It's very sad.
I love how the line breaks work with the text 
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EmilyBlemily
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I especially like the second stanza. And I agree with Anna, the line breaks are perfect. I also appreciated the tone of the poem...there is no anger or jealousy, only resigned and poignant sadness. Good work Endless Midnight!
Edit: Woops. Thanks Tyler.
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Blind Crow
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Um, emily, this poem was written by EndlessMidnight. Lol. I just reviewed it.
It's okay, clearly you are sleepy, or something of the sort 
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Band Geek
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The other three really said it all... but definitely a good poem!
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EndlessMidnight
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Thanks guys, I really appreciate all the feedback all of you give :^D
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Blind Crow
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Congratulations EndlessMidnight! Your poem "Unrequited" has been voted the best of May!
Great job!
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