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<3Kat<3
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Joined: 10 Sep 2006
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Location: Texas!
PostPosted: Tue Jun 30, 2009 10:49 pm Reply with quote

My eyes are stinging,
Hot wet tears fall,
I shut them tight,
As if it'll stop the memory,
From tearing me in two.

It's all so real and raw,
His words break my heart,
Over and over,
Until I'm so numb,
I can't feel anything.

Everyday it starts over,
And my mascara runs,
With bloodshot eyes,
I don't know how,
To live with those words,
On repeat throughout my life.



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Band Geek
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Joined: 04 Jan 2007
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 01, 2009 7:31 am Reply with quote

This is a sad one. Or a melancholy one more like. You do well in making your point and disappointment known. Very good Kat!
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Joined: 03 Oct 2006
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Location: Australia
PostPosted: Thu Jul 02, 2009 9:38 pm Reply with quote

awww

I don't like how hopeless the character is feeling, but it is very expressive.
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EmilyBlemily
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Joined: 22 Jun 2007
Posts: 397


Location: A140
PostPosted: Thu Aug 27, 2009 11:03 am Reply with quote

I especially like the last few lines:

"I don't know how,
To live with those words,
On repeat throughout my life."

I've never really understood poetry without rhymes (not that I don't find it good or meaningful, just that I don't know to rhythmically read it) But this one is quite readable.   Good job, Kat.


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